BrainTeaser | Sherma E Benosa

Life is a puzzle; we are the clues, and God is the answer.

Only When

Let’s not walk through this road, forgetting

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That only when we let trust stay afloat

Will we be able to drown our cloak of doubt.

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For dreams don’t soar in our sleep

Because only when we are wide awake

Are we able to give them wings.

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And only when our courage learns to fly

Are we able to crash our fears.

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Let’s walk through this road, remembering.

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This poem is inspired by the Amilynn verse by Mr. Bert Ugalino. But instead of strictly following the structure of the verse form (progressing from one line to two lines, then to three, and so on), I used the concept in the other Ugalino verse forms of creating a mirror effect, although again, I did not strictly use the mirror effect because I used parallelism, instead of repetition. The first and the last lines are parallel, so are the second and the fourth stanzas.  To learn about Amilynn, click  here. To read about the earlier Ugalino verse forms, click  here   .//Sherma E. Benosa; 01 April 2008; 8:50am

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4 comments on “Only When

  1. Red Bull
    April 1, 2008

    Just a spin off

    Dream is not something we see when asleep
    Its what never lets us sleep in the middle of the night!

  2. VF
    April 2, 2008

    Nice poem Buddy. I think you can call it your own metering. Shall we call it Shermallism?

    Ok, le-mi-try:

    Trust is love and soul and feeling and sharing
    And the heart itself that may decay from neglect,

    Thus, let’s not walk through this road, forgetting.

    That trust and love and soul, and the feeling and sharing
    And the heart itself needs constant replenishing

    Let’s walk through this road, remembering…

  3. brainteaser
    April 2, 2008

    Hello Red Bull. Thank you for your insight. That’s beautiful. Go, friend, and develop it. We just don’t know what you’d come up with.
    🙂

    Just like VF, my dear buddy. Nice lines! I am always humbled when you make your own scribbles from the scrawls of my pen. You’re good, and your post is great. Just great. 🙂

    Sail on, Buddy!

  4. VF
    April 3, 2008

    I don’t sail anymore Buddy.

    I’ve burned my sails,
    I’ve destroyed my ships,
    I’ve found my port.

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