Sunset After the Storm
March 30, 2008 by brainteaser
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I watch in awe as you slowly walk to the horizon’s end
Amber and gold flashing; I imagine that is you winking.
I feel the calm of your peace, taste the truth in your promise
I know you’ll be back to hold me tight in your embrace.
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You pause a little and wave to me one last time
Before disappearing to give way to the impatient night.
I linger a moment longer, caressing the mist of your scent
Then slowly walk back home for a well-deserved rest.
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[Photo Caption: Captivating Pagudpod, Ilocos Norte Sunset.]
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//Sherma E. Benosa; 19 November 2007; 10:35pm
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What power does the sunset have over our beings? In this poem, you speak of it as a lover. Whereas I would speak of it as confusion.
Stanza 1 offers the “last look” and hope for things to stay as they are.
Stanza 2 proves the helplessness of our beings, as we can merely control our actions and nothing more. The knowing of time passing and weather changing, where we can only choose the setting of our sleep number bed.
Line 3 is a bit awkward, possibly because you use “I” in “I imagine…” and then abruptly in the beginning of line 3.
“I feel the calm of your peace…” is just brilliant.
Beautiful imagery, “…caressing the mist of your scent”.
Great read.
A beautiful poem and a magnificent photo.
I love this poem. Great sharing!
Leafleass, mushygrey, and snde, thank you so much for gracing my pages.
Thanks for your analysis/comments, snde. They will surely help me improve.
Cheers to the three of you.
Great poem. Very heartfelt. The photo is indeed magnificent.